I like how you have thought about what the ship was carrying into the town, and how you have introduced a new character, Mayor Beersworth. Could you tell me how the town was astonishing? You have used this word twice to describe the town. What makes this town astonishing? I wonder what the town will do to ward off ships during the demolishment/maintenance of the lighthouse. Nice Report writing Zayn! You could look at editing your orientation to give more details e.g. the name of the town. Focus on making your orientation short, informative but also entertaining, to hook the reader into wanting to hear more about the incident. Keep it up!
I like how you have thought about what the ship was carrying into the town, and how you have introduced a new character, Mayor Beersworth. Could you tell me how the town was astonishing? You have used this word twice to describe the town. What makes this town astonishing? I wonder what the town will do to ward off ships during the demolishment/maintenance of the lighthouse. Nice Report writing Zayn! You could look at editing your orientation to give more details e.g. the name of the town. Focus on making your orientation short, informative but also entertaining, to hook the reader into wanting to hear more about the incident. Keep it up!
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